Critique

[tomtom-phs]

Starting this topic to get feedback for improvement on scripts i write.
Don't charge for scripts but still want best quality.
Here is a 'Tense then Relax' induction i used for the Taste Sensation series.

Constructive criticism requested and greatly appreciated:
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close your eyes,
relax
and begin to regulate your breathing
slowly taking in and carefully releasing
each breath.
slowly aqnd deeply.

Count backwards as you release eacy breath
From 10 the first time you exhale
Then 9 on the enxt breath
and so on until you reach one

Hold the next breath, after 1, breath zero,
hold it as long as you can
until you must release it.


Then release that breath as slow as you can,
exhaling the tension from your thoughts
releasing the resistance in your mind
with that slowly exhaled breath'
clensing your subconscious
letting it take charge over your consciousness
bringing your subconscious mind to the forefront
letting it concentrate on my words
as your consciouwness drifts and sleeps

Now that your breathing is slow, deep, and even
as you continue to breath evenly,
inhaling
and exhaling
slowly, deeply and evenly
soft puffs of consciousness slipping away
allowing your subconscious to focus on my words and accept what they are telling you.
now, you are going to concentrate on relaxing the muscles of your body.

Begin with the muscles of your face and head and neck
easing all tention from those areas of your body,
forcing all tension and physical resistance to your relaxation, downward
into your chest,
until your face and head and neck muscles are completely relaxed.

each time you add tension and resistance to your chest
from other areas of your body
that tension will gradually decrease with each breath you exhale

Then tense all of your face and head and neck muscles as tight as you can.
Hold that tension as long as you can,
then as you exhale,
release that tension and resistance all at once,
letting all of the remaianing tension and resistance in those muscles flow downward
to join that which you have already forced downward into your chest.

Now i want you to gradually relax all of the tension and physical resistance in the muscles of your fingers and hands
Forcing all of that resistance and tension upward into your forearms
until your fingers and hands are completely relaxed

Then once again tense those muscles
the muscles of your fingers and hands
holding that tensioon as tight and as long as you can
until on an exhale,
you force the last of the tension and resistance in your fingers and hands
upward to join the tension you have in your forearms

Gradually expell all of the tension and resistance from your forearms, upper arms, and shoulders
until it joins the tension in your chest.
until your forearms, upper arms and shoulders are completely relaxed.

each time you add tension and resistance to your chest
from other areas of your body
that tension will gradually decrease with each breath you exhale

Once again tighten and tense all of the muscles in your forearms, upper arms and shoulders
hold that tension as tight as you can
for as long as you can
then on one exhaled breath,
allow it to flow into your chest.

Gradually reduce all of the tension and resistance in your toes and feet
forcing that tension upward into your calves and shins
until the muscles of your toes and feet are completely relaxed.

Now tighten all of the muscles in your toes and feet as tight as you can
hold that tension and resistance as long as you can
then as you exhale
allow all of that tension to drain away
to join that which is in your calves and shins

Now i want you to gradully reduce the tension and resistance in your calves, shins, thighs and hips
into your groin
until your calves, and shins, and thighs and hips are completely relaxed
and there is a tightness in your groin growing as if from strong arousal.

Once your calves, shins, thighs and hipos are completely relaxed
tighten the muscles in those areas as tight as you can
hold that tension and resistance as long as you can
until on a single exhaled breath'all of that tension
flows into your alread thightened and aroused groin area.

clench the muscles of your groin and but with each inhaled breath
expell this tension upward into your abdomen with each exhaled breath
until you are relaxed from your toes to your abdomen
relaxed from your fingers and head to your chest

tighten the muscles of your abdomen with each inhaled breath
expell that tension and resistance from your abdomen to your chest
with each exhaled breath.
until your abdomen is completely relaxed
the only tension and resistance left in your body
is in your chest.

each time you add tension and resistance to your chest
from other areas of your body
that tension will gradually decrease with each breath you exhale

Now take a deep breath,
as deep as you can inhale
holding that breath deeply
drawing every tiny bit of remaining tension and resistance
from other areas of your body and mind
holding that breath as long as you can

Then release that breath as slow as you can,
exhaling the tension from your thoughts and muscles
releasing all resistance in your mind and body
with that slowly exhaled breath'
clensing your subconscious completely
letting it take charge over your consciousness
bringing your subconscious mind to the forefront
open, unresisting, accepting
letting it concentrate on my words
as your consciouwness drifts and sleeps
drifts and sleep

enjoy this state of complete relaxation
enjpy the warm, soft, relaxing sensations of surrender
your conscious mind drifting and sleeping
your subconsious mind open and accepting of my words
a wonderful state

such a great feeling
that you find you would like to experience this state of relaxation
again and again
your totally open and obedient subconscious mind
can now accept a way to be able to return to such a state.

All you have to do is allow your subcoinscious to focus on my words
to accept the way you can return to this blissful state
so simple
so easy.

[tomtom-phs]

(Work on a situational trigger i have used on email slaves, but never fully developed as a script for WMM. Parts taken and modified from an arousal script. Please give constructive criticism)

more relaxed with every word, deep and obedient and relaxed.
Just deep and obedient and relaxed as you read this email and obey.
read and obey and relax.

From now on, every day, the first time that day that you see a green traffic light,
you will discover yourself becoming strongly, sexually aroused by the VERY NEXT WORD you hear or read after your green light trigger, no matter how common that word is.
That next word will become your new daily arousal trigger for the rest of that day.

For the rest of that day, regardless of where you are, that trigger word will cause you to instantly become very aroused.
You will find yourself simply becoming more and more sexually excited.
You won't be able to keep it from happening, it's not a choice, it is simply what will happen when you hear or read the new daily arousal trigger....become fully aroused.

Each new day, the first word you hear or read after seeing a 'green traffic light', will become your new arousal trigger for the rest of that day.
it will make you feel a little jolt of sexual pleasure through your body,
and you will simply immediately become very aroused, very excited.

It's not something you can control or resist. Your arousal will cool down on it's own, taking as much or as little time as needed.

But the moment you hear or read your arousal trigger for that day, you will immediately become aroused, sexually excited.
No matter where you are,

as if some of the most exciting things you can think of (and go ahead and think of them), as if they've happened to you, or are happening to you.

It simply won't be something you can stop your body from reacting to,
the moment you hear or read that day's new arousal trigger, you will instantly become ready and needing, sexually aroused.

It is simply what will happen when you hear or read the daily arousal trigger word.

you will find yourself very intently aroused by whatever is going on, you will find reasons to be aroused and you will quickly experience strong arousal.
You will simply find your body responding as you become instantly aroused
The trigger pushing you hotter and hotter, more and more aroused.

And you will listen to this file again, often.
with every time you listen making the trigger sink deeper and deeper into your mind, so you will always accept it,
so that it becomes a part of who you are and what you are.
So that it becomes a part of you, something you want, something you enjoy hearing or reading.

That is simply how it is and how it will be, and you accept that and want it more and more.
And you will listen to this file often, feeling the situational trigger becoming more and more acepted, every time you listen.

Now you will find that place in your subconscious mind where you put all thoughts and memories you wish to forget.
And you will file all memories of the contents of this file, and all the suggestions it contains, in that place

Knowing that you listened to the file
Knowing that it put you under
But not remembering what it contained or how it affected you.

Still, even with the faded memory, fully accepting it's suggestions
Reinforcing all of it's suggestions
Making this situational trigger stronger and stronger each time you listen