Could only give it a three. Your voice is annoying and distracting. Were it not for the deep trance I entered into before listening I probably would have bailed. I did get a slight re-trance and effect afterwards, so I think the concept is sound. It needs some polishing, if I might make a few suggestions. Fix the voice. I\'m not sure how old or young, or what sex, you are, but a falsetto of a 6yr old boy/girl is horrid. If you must change your voice, record it normally and use a quality pitch-shifter in editing. Cleaning up the background noise or covering it would help too. Finally, rewrite the script a bit to smooth it out. You seemed to get overly excited in speaking, forgetting your place perhaps, and definitely having trouble with the wording. Your vocabulary seemed limited and restrained, even ashamed at times. Maintaining a flow prevents jarring the conscience back into place. When helping others to imagine something, maintaining a proper flow is important, doubly so in establishing a realism.

I disagree with HuntingWolf30, I love your voice. It sounds soothing and easy to trust.